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Iwanttointroduceyoumybestfriend.HisnameisLinTaowhois15yearsold.Helikesplayingbasketball,swimmingandsoon.Buthedoesn'tliketoplayPing-Pong.HisbirthdayisonJanuary16th.Helikeseatingchicken,fruitandvegetables.Soheisveryhealthy.Hedoesn'tliketoeaticecream.HisfavoritesubjectisEnglish,becausehethinksit'sinteresting.Doyouwanttomakefriendswithhim?
Youcanwritetoletmeknowandwecanplaytogethernexttime.Yours,
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DearPaul,IhaveagoodfriendinChina.HisnameisLinTao.Heis15yearsold.Hisfavoritehobbyareplayingbasketball,swimmingandsoon.Buthedoesn'tliketoplayPing-Pongball.HisbirthdayisonJanuary16th.Helikeseatingchickenwhenhisbirthdaycamefrom.AndIthinkheishealthyverymuch.Becausefruitesandvegetablesaregoodforhim.Hedoesn'tliketoeatice-creamafterlunch.HisfavoritesubjectisEnglish,becausehethinksit'sinteresting.Thesearehisinformation.Ifyouwanttomakefriendswithhim.Youcancallhistelephonenumberis0797-365421.Somuchaboutmyfriend,LinTao.Doyoulikehim?
Yours,Bill
DearPaul,
Bill
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